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Insomnia by ~BloodRedFlowers:iconBloodRedFlowers:



It's dark again,
And I still can't sleep
I miss you now, and I'll miss you then
Forget about counting sheep.

My ceiling's white, as always
And the lights forever dark
Waiting for the sun's first rays,
So with my pen, I'll make these marks.

For I have no more tears to cry
And my blades are dull and lost
So my pillows are nice and dry
If only I had known the cost

It's midnight now
And I'd love to think
That lucidity would take a bow
And the red numbers would fade to pink

My eyelids stay open
To keep the dreams at bay
My parents fighting in the den,
and into sleep, I cannot drift away.
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In a fit of insomnia, I wrote this, yes around midnight.

*so sleepy*

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~blood-sucker-vampire:iconblood-sucker-vampire: May 15, 2008, 5:47:36 PM Mood: Love
wow i always love poems, keep writing!
~BloodRedFlowers:iconBloodRedFlowers: May 15, 2008, 5:49:47 PM
Thank you! (Wow...I only uploaded this...5 minutes ago)

And I write one poem everyday and upload it here. So I AM keeping writing.

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The only difference between a rut and a grave is the depth.
*Tenebricosus:iconTenebricosus: May 15, 2008, 6:00:47 PM
Normally I'm not a big fan of rhyming, but the way this is written was just so good to me that I will ignore the fact that it has rhymes.. =D=D

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"Wise men talk because they have something to say; fools, because they have to say something." -- Plato

"If you can't dazzle the world with your knowledge, baffle them with your bullshit"
~BloodRedFlowers:iconBloodRedFlowers: May 15, 2008, 6:02:03 PM
Well, I almost never write rhyming poetry, but this idea came to my in a rhyme...so. Yeah.

And thank you.

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The only difference between a rut and a grave is the depth.
~Little-Alice-Doll:iconLittle-Alice-Doll: May 15, 2008, 10:58:21 PM
Yes,I'm with Tenebricosus,I normally Hate rhyming poetry,but this is beautiful!
(I love this)At least theese bouts of sleepless night are good for something!

Do you know what "Advanced Critique Encouraged" means?
~janusslav:iconjanusslav: May 16, 2008, 11:35:49 AM Mood: Neutral
hey really really like that, you are really good at this gotta hand it to you, keep writing 'cause you got a future in that!

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Procaine Needle,
Glistening Drops,
Cold Injection,
Heartbeat Stops,
~BloodRedFlowers:iconBloodRedFlowers: May 16, 2008, 12:38:19 PM
Thanks! I only write for myself, but it really like it when it means something to other people too.

I wish I could keep writing- But people rarely get published, if ever. And plus, I can never stick to something. I lack commitment... :P But I have made an oath to get publishd by the time I graduate college (That's 7 years, folks)

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The only difference between a rut and a grave is the depth.
~BloodRedFlowers:iconBloodRedFlowers: May 16, 2008, 12:48:25 PM
I love that you love this. And yeah, insomnia IS good for somethings.

Advanced Critique Encouraged mean that I want you to give me constructive critisism, not just "OOOh, PREETY!". Not that you ever just me anything but great critique (But SOME people...).

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The only difference between a rut and a grave is the depth.
~blood-sucker-vampire:iconblood-sucker-vampire: May 16, 2008, 3:38:51 PM
u rock i love poetry like urs wanna b friends?
~BloodRedFlowers:iconBloodRedFlowers: May 16, 2008, 3:46:59 PM
Sure (and BTW, I love vampyres too. Hence my nickname- Mollypyre)

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The only difference between a rut and a grave is the depth.